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it is the shadow of the moon you see,
beyond this, there is no treacherous deed.
i speak of the evil only reflecting thee
let thou dance to the sowing of the seed.

and let the falling moon strike us mellow.
come my dear child, let us begin thine death
then let them hear your furious bellow
let them fear you as they seal your last breath,

and let the moon glow an angry scarlet.
as the Gods take away their sacrifice,
you shall hear the clanking of the Goblet.
for there's no sin in this terrible vice.

with this solemn night, all deeds done are done,
let us not grieve the return of the sun.
:iconlmeoka:
A few things to note:
First, I was going to play with some old English, but I only ended up using three words; thee, thou, and thine.
Secondly, I really suck at titling my writing, so the title may not be the best match.
Thirdly, I did check the meter in this, so I hope I didn't miss anything.
I also realized that I don't really have much of a shift between the octave and the sestet, I was really trying to focus on meter and word choice, though it is not the best. For my first real try with an English sonnet, I don't think it's so bad.
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:iconthewitchofgrich:
I love how you combined the older version of English with the modern one! Beautiful!! :D
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~IceGlazedEyes Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:) I like it.
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:iconlmeoka:
I'm glad you liked it :)
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